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Post by cloudbat on Oct 1, 2012 21:40:23 GMT -6
Pinestar (who was missing and wanted for the battle) returns.
He breaks it to them all that they suck and he’s forever shunning them. Well, no. But:
““Cats of ThunderClan,” Pinestar began, and his voice echoed around the silent clearing until his words bounced off the trees and rocks. “I can no longer be your leader. From now on, I will leave the Clan and live with housefolk in the Twolegplace.”
Again with Pinestar's ability to use Echoed Voice. Supposedly, this is why Tigerstar (currently Tigerkit) hates kittypets: his dad left the Clan to be one. I’m not really sure if that’s a legitimate reason or not. Who knows. I guess so.
“…the air crackled with tension.”
Snap crackle pop! Clan tension. (to the tune of the Rice Krispies commercial jingle)
“Poppydawn stroked her tail along Sweetpaw’s pelt.”
The tail was promptly ripped off by the Cat Body Language Police and she was fined fifty dollars. Also kinda creepy stroking her dead daughter.
“I wouldn’t be surprised if one of the leaders suggests an addition to the warrior code, that all true leaders scorn the easy life of a kittypet.”
And of course, this comes true. Because Pinestar is Just That Awesome.
“Sunfall stepped forward and touched Pinestar’s flank with the tip of his tail.”
Sunfall’s tail was also forcibly removed by the CBLP (see the case of Poppydawn), and he was smacked with a wet fish as well.
“Murmurs of acceptance rippled through the Clan, though Stormtail and Adderfang kept a stony silence.”
That promptly crashed down and killed them from where it had been hovering in the air.
“Pinestar gently drew it away.”
This line is referring to Tigerkit pouncing on his dad’s tail, and it reminds me of a strange issue I have with the Warriors series. Sometimes kits are referred to as he or she, but sometimes they are called it. I do not understand this. You’d think, being cared for and being members of their own species, kits would never be called “it.” It’s demeaning, at least in human culture, and these cats are supposed to have human qualities. So I really don’t know what’s going on here.
“Goosefeather was staring at him, horror sparking his gaze.”
Which promptly set Sunfall (who he was looking at) on fire and he tragically died without his tail.
“We should have stopped listening to this raddled old fleabag moons ago!”
Der gasp! An intelligent BlunderClanner! I hereby certify Robinwing as one I.Q. point smarter than the average BC (BlunderClanner).
And the chapter ends with Featherwhisker and Sunfall going off to name Sunfall leader at the Holy Disco Ball.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 1, 2012 21:42:24 GMT -6
Brief Blue Sue angst over Snowfur liking Thistleclaw, then Sunstar and Featherwhisker return. Did I mention they’re brothers? Just in case anyone wanted to know. Everyone is happy he’s approved to be leader.
“When his gaze reached her, cold and burning at the same time, Bluefur blinked and began cheering once more.”
This is Goosefeather, and this line makes me snort. Is ice shooting out of one of his eyes and heat rays our of the other at her? STONER POWERS
“Sunstar signaled with his tail to one of the cats below him.”
Ohnoes! He must have grown another one! Cat Body Language Police, help me!
CBLP: What seems to be the prob…THERE IS AN UNAUTHORIZED TAIL ON THAT FELINE! GET HIM!
Sunstar: –is dragged off and his tail is torn off again and the base of it singed so it won’t grow again-
Anyway, let’s continue.
“The light gray tabby tom dipped his head.”
Light. Gray. Tabby. Yet he has the name TAWNY-flipping-SPOTS. Was his mom hallucinating when he was born or something? Or the Erins delight in annoying me? I can’t decide.
“Rosepaw, from this moment you will be known as Rosetail.”
Aha. Anyone remember her from Into the Wild? “Brave Rosetail” the elder who DIED when ShadowClan invaded only got a passing mention while Firestu got all the praise. Poor Rosetail, such a sad fate.
“ThunderClan has kits in the nursery”
Mmm, two of whom are unwell.
“and the warriors’ den is full.”
I’m thinking that’s a bad thing, no more room for new ones.
“I’m going to be up there one day,” hissed the young warrior, “addressing the Clan.” As Snowfur purred encouragingly, Bluefur felt the fur lift along her spine. Not if I get there first!”
She sounds like a bratty kid trying to get to the chocolate before another kid so she can have it all. Besides, we haven’t really seen any evidence that Thistleclaw is so bad. Sure, he doesn’t like Blue Sue. Sure, he ticks her off by being her sister’s mate. But he hasn’t actually DONE anything bad, you know.
“Was the whole Clan gossiping about Snowfur and Thistleclaw? Why did her sister have to be so obvious? Prickling with embarrassment, she headed for the ravine.”
Maybe if it were me I’d be embarrassed too, although I think it’s more likely I wouldn’t care and would just ignore it. It’s not me, after all, so why should I be embarrassed? My sister’s welcome to others gossiping about her if she’s being dumb and lovey-dovey. It’s almost OOC for her – normally she’d be saying “this is what she deserves for falling in love with him” or something like that.
Crap about Bluefur not finding Thrushpelt’s comment about Thistle and Snow not being able to manage without each other funny and thinking to herself that he can’t and shouldn’t tease her about her sister.
Maybe it’s just me, but I would have laughed at the comment, and said “Yeah, totally. Aren’t they dumb?” but maybe that’s just my disdainful attitude about romance.
They patrol, nothing happens.
Blue Sue gets back and is about to eat when Snowfur begs her to hunt with her, Blue Sue gets ****ed but agrees.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 1, 2012 21:45:15 GMT -6
Snowfur’s kits are being born.
Scratch that: one kit. He’s white. And named Whitekit.
Yep, this is good old Whitestorm. Lionheart’s backup for the soft idiot role.
Thistleclaw says this hilarious line, though, when Snowfur asks if she can name her son Whitekit.
“Thistleclaw nodded. “We can call him whatever you want.”
Call me Ishmael Whitekit.
“Relieved, Bluefur sat back and watched Whitekit suckle, amazed that he knew what to do already.”
Woman, he’s a kit. What else is he going to do? Tap-dance?
“Look!” Snowfur’s mew work Bluefur the next morning. “He’s opened his eyes already!”
Erinland does not have realistic cats like we have gravity.
Whitekit is encouraged outside by Tigerkit. He’s talking already. And walking.
I am 100% done with their lack of just doing anything to maintain willing suspension of disbelief.
Robinwing’s kits – Frostkit and Brindlekit (Frostfur and Brindleface) are born. Stuff happens. We’re informed that the warrior code addition that Pinestar predicted was added.
“The medicine cat stank. His clotted pelt looked like it hadn’t been washed in a moon. And now he was cursing at kits! Had he gone completely mad?”
I smell a stereotype. Smells like drugs.
Goosefeather seems inexplicably angry at Tigerkit in particular, shouting “Keep that creature away from me!”
It’s like he knows what he’ll be in the future...because, why?
Bear in mind that this is the cat who sent ThunderClan into pointless battle and who no one trusts.
So why is he the one who knows Bluestar will come to power and knows Tigerkit will go over to the Dark Side?
If you can tell me why I will tell you where the treasure is buried and how you can hack the laws of physics.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 1, 2012 21:49:29 GMT -6
Snowfur makes a silly complaint about how why does Thistleclaw get to go on patrol while I have to sit in the nursery? Blue Sue says her mate can't give their son milk.
Snowypants is clearly holding the idiot ball.
Blah stuff happens blah. Blue Sue leaves camp.
Then this priceless moment happens: She sees Oakheart (remember him?) asleep. On a rock. In ThunderClan territory.
Excuse me while I go repeatedly bash my head into a hard surface.
Better now.
Cue "WTF?" face.
I can't believe this. I freaking can't believe this. This cat must be dumber than the average sock, with all due respect to the sock (it's okay, Fuzzles, you know I love you). I know Oakheart is arrogant and all, but this is like brain deficiency stupid. No matter how puffed up a cat is, they're not going to just stroll leisurely into another Clan's territory, unless it's a dire emergency. I don't count a nap as a dire emergency, unless RiverClan has suddenly acquired boom boxes that they play obsessively and poor Oakheart had to sneak away just to catch a wink or two.
To preserve my shreds of sanity, from this point forward I shall assume that Oakheart is being yanked by a Plot Leash and has a script shoved in his face and a knife held to his neck. I shall also assume his secret ambition is to kill Blue Sue by pretending to be in love with her, but this is foiled by the Erins forcing him to cooperate.
I feel much better now.
Blue Sue, after a moment of deliberation, attacks him. Instead of, you know, forcing him off and avoiding general injury. She has all rights to do this. But no, always the violent solution first. She's my hero.
"Her pelt sparked with fury"
Which promptly burned through her fur and set her ablaze. She dived into the river to be saved, but drowned. Thus was the prophecy fulfilled.
"I couldn't resist such a sunny spot."
...or the yank of the Plot Leash.
"You couldn't resist?" (said the angry sue)
"Nope, the Plot Leash forced me; I hate the Erins, don't you? I'm actually a better character than this, but I'm forced this way because the authors can't write for beans and they want me to enter into a forbidden and completely illogical relationship with you. I'm only doing this because I have a knife at my throat; seriously, I don't like you at all. That being said, we're going to have children. You'll be such a crap mother that one of them will die. Kapeesh? Kapeesh."
That's what should be there, just saying.
Wow that's long. Anyway.
Cue Rosetail encounter (a moment of silence for poor murdered Rosetail) with Blue Sue. Rosetail accuses Blue Sue of looking "moony" over a tom.
HEAD MEET DESK
I have several problems with this.
a) it makes no sense.
b) Blue Sue herself denies it - we don't even get any romantic thoughts from her. Which we shouldn't anyway, but because these two fall in love ( for some godforsaken reason) she might have 'em. Not that it would make sense. Anyway.
c) Why DOES she fall in love with Oakheart anyway? They never knew each other. They just met randomly like once...maybe twice, if memory serves. And one of those times was why she became a mom. Then they never met again. The point is that this is not enough time to build up a relationship of that caliber, let alone a relationship at all. The whole romance is just shoved in there for Blue Sue angst and so a half-Clan cat can be RiverClan's leader. (Blue Sue's only surviving kid, Mistystar of RiverClan.)
Forbidden romance is generally idiotic by nature, but this stands out.
Then the topic turns to Whitekit, otherwise known as Genetic Freak #42. (soft idiot role included)
There's a little more conversation, and the two go back to camp, Rosey having informed Blue Sue that her sister is getting all bothered sitting in the nursery being bored. Henceforth, Blue Sue takes her sister (who, despite having wanted to go out, fusses unnecessarily over her son) out. End chapter.
Next up is a death scene! Whoo!
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 1, 2012 21:53:32 GMT -6
This chapter starts out relatively normally. Blue Sue and her restless Sue-ster go out into the forest. Blue Sue leads them toward the river. Gee, I wonder why. Apparently because it's quiet and "out of the way of hunting patrols." Sure. You just keep talking, you lusty furball. I'm onto you. Or I would be if I didn't know this would turn out anyway.
Snowfur pounces on her and they playfight. There's this funny bit:
"With a playful hiss, Snowfur lunged at her, giving her a shove that sent her tumbling against a bramble heavy with blackberries. The fruit trembled as Bluefur found her paws."
What? Either Bluefur was momentarily turned intangible, or those blackberries are immune to cats. Berries are of a soft and easily broken constitution - it doesn't take much to split the skin and have the juice ooze out. So why didn't that happen to Bluey? Maybe the blackberries are just that epic. If so I want some. I would throw them at stuff to watch them bounce off because I'm easily entertained.
Anyway!
..oh this is priceless. No. Really.
Blue Sue fights back (playfully) and then this classic little scene happens:
"Never!" (Say Never!) Bluefur yowled. She pushed with her hind paws and rolled Snowfur off, tumbling her onto the branches so the berries stained her fur."
So the berries didn't affect Bluefur but messed up Snowy's pelt?
There's something wrong with that.
I know, I know, I'm a nitpicker. Still. Why? Maybe the Erins think purple and white go better together than purple and blue. I prefer both. Very pretty in watercolor pictures. Or maybe it's just her mighty Sue Powers Of Outstanding Niftiness (SPOON). Powerful crap that is. It also has nothing to do with a certain scribe or the March Hare.
They wander down to the riverbank. Snowfur huffs and puffs (and hopefully blows no houses down) and moans that she's out of practice. What? Lady, I know you've been lying around raising your kid, but it's not like you've been eating Kentucky fried chicken topped off with chocolate mousse pies all day and you feel like the ground's a lot closer to your stomach than it was. At least not to my knowledge.
The topic turns to RiverClan and whether they'll invade again. For a moment I thought of Invader Zim and Grr and pictured them as green aliens and funny robots. Eheheh.
Snowfur insults them and Blue Sue gets all "peace is the answer, yo." The discussion continues with Blue Sue being all fair and open-minded (why?) and Snowfur teasingly asking her if she wants to take a swim. Blue Sue has to stop herself from staggering into the water. What.
Blue Sue tells how she drove off Oakheart, but says he wasn't arrogant. Snowfur accuses her of liking him. The conversation wanders into the warrior code and how Thrushpelt likes Bluefur and I start to wonder if the purple streaks in Snowfur's fur look artistic or abstract.
"Nice!" Bluefur scoffed. "Besides..." She glared at Snowfur. "I'm not looking for a mate. I don't want to end up in the nursery suckling kits."
Ooh. You just got burned, Snowypants. -snaps fingers into gun motions-
Snowy thunders (pun unintentional) off, Bluey follows. Snowy smells ShadowClan.
Hi ShadowClan! How are ya? Can you injure them for me? Please? I'll give you a cookie! Okay, two cookies. Fine. Have it your way.
Blah blah, they hear ShadowClanners arguing about prey they caught on Thunder territory, they attack them.
Snowfur dies getting hit by a car while chasing Shadow kitties off.
Let us analyze this: 1. Snowfur should've been able to tell a car was coming. 2. She should have, as a capable warrior, been able to move out of the way. Cats can move pretty darn fast when they want to. 3. Blue Sue should have warned her. Which she didn't. Despite having working hearing and eyes.
I really don't have much more to say here.
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Post by Grey on Oct 2, 2012 3:12:09 GMT -6
I think "it" is referring to Pinestar's tail, not Tigerkit. Or, I hope that's what they meant.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 9:22:27 GMT -6
Hopefully. Ten suggested that as well, but as the text doesn't clarify...
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 10:41:27 GMT -6
Blue Sue tries to get her sister to get up, saying walking will make her feel better.
News to doctors: If someone has just been hit by a car, don't bother with casts! They can bounce up and do whatever they want, because of course being run over by a speeding vehicle makes all your motor functions better than ever!
I know she's in denial, but really. Don't be finably stupid, Blue Sue.
However, the non-injured sister managed to knock a few brain cells together and drags Snowy away.
"A thin trail of blood rolled from Snowfur's mouth."
Rolled? Really? Slid or dripped or trailed I could understand, but rolled? Is Snowfur's blood solid?
Blue Sue regrets telling her sister about Oakheart, thinking none of this would have happened if Snowy hadn't got angry and run off. She then runs into a ThunderClan patrol and thinks "Everything would be fine now."
I'll let this one pass because she does have a good reason to be in denial, and it's not as ridiculous as the line before.
Adderfang grasps Snowfur's scruff (just as Blue Sue was doing to drag her sister) and she says "Be careful!" Bluefur cautioned, heart lurching. "I think she's hurt."
Think? Woman, if you haven't recognized by now that your sister is heavily (and as we know, mortally) injured, there's something wrong with you. Also, you were doing the exact same thing.
"She felt White-eye's tail drape over her shoulders."
Who has seen a cat do this? Anyone at all? No. Does it make any sense? No. Do the Erins own cats? Yes. Should they know cats don't do this? Yes. Am I rambling? Probably.
"She's hurt. She's just hurt. No matter how many times she repeated the words in her head, her heart had recognized the scent of death on her sister. She knew Snowfur was dead, and with each step the horror grew stronger, until grief threatened to swamp her."
This, at least, is why despite all her Sueness and idiocy, Blue Sue is better than Firefail. She reacts when cats die, she doesn't sit and look bored and go "oh look, my ego. It's even bigger. Yay!".
They get back to camp and Adderfang insists that Bluefur tell Whitekit that his mom is dead. Blue Sue says she can't do it, so White-eye suggests Thistleclaw.
"No!" Bluefur bristled. Thistleclaw would never be gentle enough for news like this. "I'll tell him."
...really? I know she doesn't like him, but really? Snowfur was his MATE and the mother of his SON, for cripes' sakes. Does she really think he's that much of a moron that he'd say "Your mom's dead, kid. Life is tough, so get over it." Thistleclaw is a jerk, but he does care about his family.
So she goes to see Whitekit and brings him outside of the nursery to tell him.
"She felt her heart crack. So much pain."
For a moment there I pictured Blue Sue's heart as a red candy heart getting sliced. Call me cynical.
As breaking horrible news goes, Blue Sue doesn't start off too badly but then delivers this line as Whitekit insists that he can visit StarClan and see his mother again.
"She was going to have to break his heart. "She's dead, Whitekit. You won't see her anymore. You won't smell her or hear her or feel her fur next to yours ever again."
If that's not insensitive I don't know what is. And she calls Thistleclaw harsh.
And then he "...galloped into the clearing, stopping beside his mother's body. "I'll live out here now, with you," he squeaked, pressing his nose into her cold fur."
This is actually well done, but the use of the verb "galloping" to describe a cat, let alone a kit, is ridiculous. Horses gallop. Cats don't gallop, with the possible exception of Firestar as he's a zombie/horse/bat.
Then Thistleclaw appears and yells at Blue Sue, saying it's all her fault. Blue Sue thinks that he's right. Then her father (Stormtail) appears and makes Thistleclaw leave. Blue Sue says to her dad: "I can't lose Snowfur as well as Moonflower. Why did they both have to die?" Stormtail shook his head. "Only StarClan knows that." "Then StarClan is stupid and cruel!"
Terrible answer, but Blue Sue's reaction is one of her best moments in the whole book.
Stormtail says life must go on and that she has other Clanmates and that her Clan still depends on her. blue Sue says she doesn't care. Stormtail says he knows she does, and "When she didn't reply, he licked her between the ears and padded away."
I like Stormtail. He has sense, but he also has feelings (His eyes "shone with sorrow" when he popped up) He was one of the few who was properly irritated when Pinestar left.
Blue Sue is sad and angsty, and the chapter ends.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 10:45:31 GMT -6
"Bluefur hooked the dead mouse absently on her claw and let it fall onto the ground again with a damp plop. She had no appetite. Even the smell of fresh-kill made her queasy."
And of course, the logical solution to this problem is to go get a piece of fresh-kill.
"Lying alone at the edge of the clearing, she studied her Clanmates through half-closed eyes. They were sharing tongues before tonight's Gathering, murmuring cheerfully to one another as if Snowfur had never existed, even though it had only been half a moon since her death."
Because, of course, when a main character's sister dies, the whole Clan is supposed to be emo and mope about doing nothing for a moon. That makes perfect sense.
"Tawnyspots got to his paws and padded from the knot of warriors sharing prey beside the nettle patch. He glanced at the mouse. "That's wasted fresh-kill now" he observed. His tail was twitching. "Sunstar wants you to go to the Gathering.""
Tawnyspots, despite his stupid name, gets a smiley face sticker for calling Blue Sue on her crap.
"Bluefur sighed. Well, I don't want to go. It was a long trek and the evening was chilly. And who made you my mentor? I'm a warrior now, remember?"
While I understand not wanting to go because it's cold, her brattiness is hardly reasonable. All he did was point out that she's being an idiot by wasting prey, (which she is) and tell her that Sunstar wants her to go the Gathering. He didn't even decide that she was coming, so why is she annoyed at him? What a brat.
""It's time you started making an effort." Tawnyspots looked firmly at her. "I've spared you from as many border patrols and parties as I can, but all you do is mope around camp. Perhaps if you started to act more like a Clan cat, you might feel better.""
Tawnyspots has been promoted to my favorite character in the book, with Hawkheart as second and Stormtail as third.
He also tells her to spend more time with Whitekit, since she stopped since Snowfur died. I don't care much about Whitekit, but I'm glad he tells it like it is to her.
""What makes you so special that you can get away without doing anything for your Clan?" Tanwyspots demanded. I lost my sister! Bluefur bit back the reply though she wanted to wail it to the darkening sky. Instead she hauled herself to her paws. "Nothing makes me special," she growled. "I'll go to the Gathering if it makes you happy."
Someone talks sense to her and she's an ungrateful jerk. While I'll admit to having been the same way at a period in my life (that I now look back and hate myself for) she's a grown warrior, not a thirteen-year-old idiot like I was. If she's supposed to be so great and mighty, she should be acting better than this. Tawnyspots as leader, not this jerkface.
"Dappletail brushed against Bluefur as she joined her Clanmates. Patchpelt dipped his head to her, and rosetail stood beside her as though she were an apprentice who needed guiding. Bluefur pulled. There was nothing any of her Clanmates could do to ease her pain. She wished they wouldn't bother."
What. The. Noun.
FIRST she was angry because her Clanmates weren't being supportive enough, and NOW she's irritated because they're trying to be kind to her?!
I hate you, Blue Sue. I really, really do. You make it so easy.
Featherwhisker comes up to Blue Brat and says her sister's watching over her and Whitekit. Blue Sue "couldn't see what good that would do any of them." She has a point, admittedly. Featherwhisker then says Whitekit will need her help to make the right choices and be a true warrior. For a moment there I thought Featherwhisker was subtly telling Blue Sue to make sure her nephew doesn't do drugs, and then I remembered that it's warriors.
Blah blah, sensitive crap talk about Whitekit's upbringing. They get to the Gathering.
Blue Sue runs into Oakheart. She has no romantic thoughts about him (thank Gar) and is annoyed because he tries to offer his condolences about Snowfur.
Announcements happen. Oakheart makes one and jumps up on the leaders' rock. Blue Sue thinks hateful thoughts about him. Then she talks to Rosetail who approves of him, and is conflicted. I couldn't care less and am wondering how much wood a woodchuck could chuck if a woodchuck had an electric drill.
Blah, Gathering ends. Sunstar does something slightly sensible and tells Blue Sue that she can choose to remember Snowfur by being a mope or by being a good warrior. A point for Sunstar.
Yawn. Some Blue Sue thoughts about the prophecy. Chapter ends.
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Post by celestialsquared on Oct 2, 2012 20:36:20 GMT -6
I found Snowfur's death the saddest one in the series, just because I didn't see that car coming and I hate it when anything gets hit by a car. And you made me realize how much of this book is just Bluefur angst and moping. I guess it's trying to say how rough Bluestar's life was before she became leader? But, most of the angst is being caused by her own internal conflict....Why did I waste my time reading this when I was younger? D:
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 20:49:35 GMT -6
I agree it actually had some shock value; if handled by competent authors, this could have been one of the most emotional scenes in the whole book. But I hate Blue Sue, so from her point of view I don't care that Snowfur is dead. For Snowfur as a character I care slightly more since she had something resembling a personality.
I feel the same way, bro. 20$ bucks. Why.
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Post by victorystars on Oct 2, 2012 20:53:02 GMT -6
I actually felt angry tha she wouldn't let Thistleclaw tell Whitekit what happened. That line just made me so mad, and I do't even know why. Bluestar is slowly becoming my least favourite character. Thanks for writing this, it's entertaining, whle it also shows that Bluesue is an angsty brat. Does it ever explain why she hates Thistleclaw so much, but trusted Tigerclaw, who was..basically the same?
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 20:53:45 GMT -6
Blue Sue falls asleep, and sleep comes "furiously." I'm serious, it actually says that in the book. I suppose unconsciousness is a dangerous thing, it is, filled with burning rage that will turn our brains to ashes.
It's a dream of Snowfur and Whitekit in the river in the gorge being swept downstream, and surprisingly enough, it's actually well-described.
"It should be me drowning, not them. This is my destiny, not theirs."
...for some reason. And yet, I just realized something: Technically, Bluestar was not indeed "the fire." Since we're to believe Goosefeather was actually referring to Firestar, why wasn't it he who drowned? Why was Bluestar important anyway? WHY IS THIS BOOK SO LONG?
Blue Sue wakes up from her dream of relations dying and immediately rushes out to see if Whitekit's okay. While that is understandable, it's also rather illogical. Whenever I have realistic nightmares, and I wake up from them, I'm usually too paralyzed and frightened to move for a few minutes and just lie there giving thanks it wasn't real. True, I don't expect everyone to be like me, but I would think that this must be a fairly common reaction.
"Thank StarClan, it was only a dream."
OH CRAP SHE'S SEEN THROUGH EVERYTHING.
Whitekit is awake, happy to see her, then falls asleep again, Blue Sue by his side. Oddly enough, only Robinwing asked Blue Sue what's wrong. Granted, it was the middle of the night. Still, I would've thought the other queens would've woken up (Frostfur and Swiftbreeze).
When Whitekit wakes up Blue Sue feels all guilty that she hasn't been paying attention to him.
Other kits wake up, Spottedkit (Spottedleaf) has "white splashes on her tortoiseshell pelt" yet she's referred to once in Into the Wild as having "a hundred shades of amber and brown" in her pelt. I know the Erins are bad at continuity, but this takes the cake, the pie, and whatever's left at the bottom of the fridge.
Kits playing, Robinwing consoles Blue Sue, blah blah.
"Robinwing touched the tip of her tail to Bluefur's shoulder."
And abruptly withdrew it, feeling the pain of all that Sueness oozing out of Blue Sue's every pore.
Thistleclaw pops up and borrows his son to teach him "battle moves." Because Thistleclaw is a moron and the least realistic parent since the stupid dad in Honey, I Shrunk The Kids.
I shall proceed to paraphrase Thistle and Blue's convo.
Blue: (in response to Thistle's remark about battle training) GASP! He's too young! D:
Thistle: Up yours, loser! He's my son, you don't pay enough attention to him, so you can kiss my tail!
Blue: "He has me, too!" (actual quote)
Then Goosefeather the Hobo says this wonderful line: "A thistle has thorns as sharp as claws," he whispered. "Don't let Whitekit get hurt by them."
Beware, Whitekit. Small plants are out to get you.
And then Blue Sue classically wonders what he meant. Oh gee I have no idea. It must have nothing to do with your own disapproval of him teaching fighting moves to his moon-old son. Not even Sherlock Holmes could solve this mystery, if he had the help of CSI and Law & Order.
Gar I hate Blue Sue.
Thistleclaw is described as "the spiky warrior." Thistleclaw shall now be referred to as Hedgehog.
"She looked back at him with distrust pricking in her pelt."
That is some emotive fur you've got covering you, Blue Sue. If I give you chocolate, will it feel left out?
"Was the young kit really ready for such an advanced battle move?"
He's not ready for battle moves at all, you utter freaking idiot. And if you really cared about his well-being, you'd stand up to Hedgehog and say, "This is not right."
But no, you just stand there. What a wonderful, caring aunt you are.
Luckily, Blue Sue is called to patrol. We are informed Tawnyspots (the deputy) is sick. Unluckily, Blue Sue has to patrol with Hedgehog. Two doses of jerkwad for the price of one.
They leave to patrol.
"...undergrowth elsewhere was brittle and flattened by rain..."
Flattened by rain? Are we to assume that this rain just so happens to be in the form of thick rubber boots with treads? Okay it's set in England, but still...
Blue Sue tries to hunt but is interrupted by Hedgehog yowling that there's a "kittypet invasion." Cue stupid bickering over kits being dangerous or not.
Blue Sue is accused of being soft on warriors from other Clans and soft on kittypets (true) and Hedgehog says he needs more proof of her loyalty before he lets her near Whitekit. What, you want her to draw up a deed or something, Hedgehog? I don't know what she's supposed to do here, admittedly.
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Post by cloudbat on Oct 2, 2012 20:56:27 GMT -6
Ahah, Victory, I only saw your post as I just posted mine.
It should make you mad because she said he would be too insensitive to do it...and then she was breathtakingly callous in breaking the news herself.
"Blue Sue is slowly becoming my least favourite character."
My most hated will always be Firestar, but she's a close second.
>w< You're welcome, I'm glad you're enjoying it. I need to finish them.
So she could be set up for a betrayal and Fireheart could become deputy is why, pretty much.
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Post by victorystars on Oct 2, 2012 21:03:24 GMT -6
Call this different characterisation, and me being dumb, but I honestly think Hedgehog is going through greif, but hadling it in a different way? Bluesue angsts and mopes. Hedgehog gets cranky and blames the last cat Snowfur was with? He's not being air about it, yeah, but at least he's not being a mopeblob.
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